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2014-04-11    来源:未知    【      托福雅思口语高分过

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic How Should College Students Relieve Pressure? You should write at least 150 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:

1)当今的大学生要面临很多来自不同方面的压力;2)大学生缓解压力的方式有…;3)你一般都是如何排解压力的?

How Should College Students Relieve Pressure?

【思路点拨】
本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一个问题,提纲第2点要求说明如何解决该问题,提纲第3点要求阐述“我”的做法,由此可判断本文应为问题解决型作文。

根据所给提纲,本文应包含如下内容:指出当今的大学生主要面临哪些压力;列举大学生缓解压力的方式;谈谈“我”是采取哪种方式排解压力的。

【参考范文】
How Should College Students Relieve Pressure?

Today’s college students face many pressures, mainly from parents’ expectation, study, economy, employment and all kinds of competition. [1]Although pressure to some extent can provide motivation, overdue pressure has a serious negative effect. Pressure can destroy a student’s confidence. [2]More seriously, it might make some students lose control of their emotions and behaviors.

[3]Considering the great damage of overdue pressure, college students should learn to how to relieve pressure. [2]First, we should have a right evaluation of ourselves [4]so as to [5]make use of advantages and avoid disadvantages. [2]Second, we should [6]set a clear aim of a struggle. The aim can give us motivation, and make us become active. [2]Third, [7]attending collective activities is an effective way to relieve pressure. [2]Finally, if you find pressure is nearly [8]beyond your control, you’d better turn to professional psychological guidance.

[2]As to me, my pressure is mainly from future employment. [4]In order to reduce it, I asked my parents help me analyse my advantages and disadvantages, and produce a more practical job objection. [2]So my employment pressure was relieved greatly. Now I become confident in my future, and I [9]do believe I can get an ideal job after my graduation.

【点评】
[1]although引导让步状语从句。

[2]过渡衔接词语,使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。

[3]“考虑到,鉴于”,介词。

[4]表示目的。

[5]“扬长避短”。

[6]“设立一个明确的奋斗目标”。

[7]动名词短语作主语,用不同于前两点的句式提出缓解压力的第三种方式。

[8]“超出…范围或能力”。

[9]强调动词believe。

【佳句临摹】
1.佳句:Although pressure to some extent can provide motivation, overdue pressure has a serious negative effect.
临摹:尽管兼职工作能够带来很多好处,但我们不应该在它上面花费太多的时间。

2.佳句:Attending collective activities is an effective way to relieve
临摹:学会如何与人沟通是步入社会的第一步也是最重要的一步。

3.佳句:In order to reduce it, I asked my parents help me analyse my advantages and disadvantages
临摹: 为了在激烈的竞争中获得优势,大学生们必须全面发展自己的能力。



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